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Deer Troy,
Plese du nut leaf. I wi—
--
I caught her writing me the note
in crayon.
poorly planned,
as she forgot to leave my room
before she started.
she looked at my face
--haggard—
with her wide hazel eyes
and gave me a hug
that would change
everything.
her small hands clutched
at my life, an anchor
to this world; at that
my plans crumbled like
buildings
on apocalypse day
and I knew, no, I knew,
that from this harbor
i would not leave.
i would not leave.
(never.)
until she let
me
go.
Literature
Break Away
A need to escape,
A need to run,
A need to be free.
My heart is tight
within my chest,
as I look to the mountains,
so far from me.
A taste of freedom,
my soul longs for,
seemingly out of reach.
If only I had wings,
to carry me across
the still waters,
to carry me away
from this dead life.
Tired of my feet
feeling parched earth,
I want to feel the grass,
see the trees,
smell the flowers.
I want to touch the sky
and break away.
Literature
Envious
Everything she has,
I want.
I want to be thin,
to have her curves,
her beautiful shaped eyes,
dancing and perfect green.
I want to have men stop,
stare, willing to do anything,
for a moment of my time,
as they do her.
I want to be so loved,
so spoiled.
Men offer her jewelry,
trips, cars, clothes...
everything they have,
just for her attention.
Anything she wants,
is hers for the asking.
I want to have her long legs,
able to go dancing,
whenever she wants,
as long as she wants.
To be able to wear...
sexy clothes,
fine jewelry,
delectable shoes.
To not be laughed at,
to be desired...
I want to be he
Literature
vacant
they both
so feared
goodbye
they never
said
hello
so they lived out
the long years
alone
and died in
their beds
still
still
still
dreaming
of each
other
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wrote it for the #BleedingHeartsPoetry "Heroes" contest.
you don't know what act of kindness can change someone's world.
full title is: (Never) Setting Sail
fkn dA and its parenthesis...
edit: !@#!$!!!!!#$!%(^*@*%@#($)%AWKEFJ THANK YOU SO MUCH!!~<3
you don't know what act of kindness can change someone's world.
full title is: (Never) Setting Sail
fkn dA and its parenthesis...
edit: !@#!$!!!!!#$!%(^*@*%@#($)%AWKEFJ THANK YOU SO MUCH!!~<3
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I like this a lot--it's an interesting angle to start with, and very touching; I get the image of a father planning to divorce / separate from her mother, though I'm not sure if that's what you intended. I do feel like you sometimes hammered the point home a bit too obviously--"the hug that would change everything" is overstating it, IMO, given that we see him change his mind completely at the end. Don't give everything away in vague lines like "everything"! --or at least, that's my own opinion. Again, it's a really enjoyable read, and I liked it a lot...it could just use a tiny bit more tweaking!